09-28-2015, 12:07 AM
Not so much a typo as poor grammar, but the lore blip about Azorus:
'Azorus, the leader of the Sun's Ichor, a disbanded extremist Mercalan sect, was very well known for the way he fed the vampires the Sun's Ichor captured his own blood to torture them. '
It's extremely awkwardly phrased.
Here's a more easily understood version of the blip I cooked up:
'Azorus was the leader of the Sun's Ichor, a disbanded extremist Mercalan sect. He was most well known for the way he tortured captured vampires, feeding them his own Glykin blood.'
'Azorus, the leader of the Sun's Ichor, a disbanded extremist Mercalan sect, was very well known for the way he fed the vampires the Sun's Ichor captured his own blood to torture them. '
It's extremely awkwardly phrased.
Here's a more easily understood version of the blip I cooked up:
'Azorus was the leader of the Sun's Ichor, a disbanded extremist Mercalan sect. He was most well known for the way he tortured captured vampires, feeding them his own Glykin blood.'